spring is when life's alive in everything.i went to xiangshan park with my mather yesterday. t-he air is very clean and the sunshine is very warm.

the xiangshan park have a piece of grass.l like lying on the ground of the park in spring.the grass is very soft,and i love the feeling of lying on the grass.and,i enjoy lying of the grass und-er the sun.

the park have many peach blossoms,too.chinese poets often compare beautiful women to peach blo-ssoms in spring. the warm quick rains and sudden frothing of pink peach blossoms and dogwood dappl-ing with white stars the dark river swamp and far-off hills.so,these peach blossoms were very beautiful. under the big tree, i fed the birds with a happy mood.the birds were very lovely,and i very li-ke them. yestreday,i have a good time.what a good day!

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spring is coming and everything begins to come back to life. it's time for go outing. i went to xiangshan park with my mother yesterday. the air was very clean. the sun shone brightly and it was very warm.

in spring, l like lying on the grass in the park. the grass was very soft, and i enjoyed the feeling of lying on the grass, especially under the sun.

all the flowers in the park were blooming beautifully. trees turned green. i heard birds singing happily. we had a picnic there. and i rode a bike, too.

i had a good time there. what a good day!

修改老师：crystal 老师

初二:陈婧涵